2nd Generation Ayra

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2nd Generation Ayra

Unread postby pd Rydia » Sat May 15, 2004 6:00 pm


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Click for full view in large <s>bad</s>goodness.

I had a hard time CGing this (the hair, face, shirt), so here's the sketch, which I find to be better all around.

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Pose copied from http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/6919006/. <p>
<center><small>Dragonhalf in English: a manga

It's big, and it's red / The red dragon, oh, the dread dragon / but never fear, for Dick is here / To slay the dragon~!</p>Edited by: pd Rydia&nbsp; Image at: 5/16/04 1:04 pm

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Re: 2nd Generation Ayra

Unread postby RedEye Dragon89 » Sat May 15, 2004 8:27 pm

C:\Program Files\Critique v.15b\>critique.exe

Critique? Y/N
Y

Select Difficulty: Easy/Standard/Heavy
S

Processing...Complete

Getting better each time!

Pose:
Unless you were trying to copy directly from the base pic, then the pose is fine. Otherwise, Ayra looks more as if she's standing upright while the base pic seems more to be in a striking position. Try lowering the head to make it look like she's leaning forward and try to make the right arm and the left hand larger to give the illusion of depth, same goes with the leg. Of course, if you weren't going for a complete copy, then it's fine how it is. Perspective is pretty hard to nail down, anyway.

Anatomy:
It was sorta mentioned in the last section... The lower left arm and hand seem too small. Same goes with the right hand, seeing how it's suppoed to be pointed towards the viewer, it should be larger in perspective (damn ye, perspective!) The inner right leg (The area between the legs) seems unusually curved. It seems a bit too intense, but just add a bit more dark blue to the area to straighten it out. The leg might become a bit fatter, but it does seem kind of skinny.

Tip:
-An open palm, fingers unspread, should be able to cover the lips, nose, and one half of both eyes when placed right on the center of the face (Except in anime, where it may only cover one third to one fifth of the eyes.). Try using that as a kind of ruler when drawing.


Coloring:
I'm seeing definite improvement. You colored according to the shape of the body rather than the source of the light. Though the wrinkles in the clothing seem somewhat randomly drawn, they're reasonably placed. Don't worry about that, though, I still have problems with clothing folds.

You're definitely getting a better grasp of anatomy, and your coloring is getting better with every pic. And that's a really nifty way to use gradients in a background! Keep it up!



Edited by: [url=http://p068.ezboard.com/brpgww60462.showUserPublicProfile?gid=redeyedragon89@rpgww60462>RedEye] at: 5/15/04 8:29 pm

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Re: 2nd Generation Ayra

Unread postby pd Rydia » Sat May 15, 2004 8:37 pm

Thanks, RED. I appreciate it! <p>
<center><small>Dragonhalf in English: a manga

It's big, and it's red / The red dragon, oh, the dread dragon / but never fear, for Dick is here / To slay the dragon~!</p>

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Re: 2nd Generation Ayra

Unread postby SALSAlys » Sat May 15, 2004 8:51 pm

....erm, RED just gave a much better critique than I could. o__o

So I just jump on the applause bandwagon!

WAI! WAI WAI!

I suck at doing anthro faces, and I like the coloring.


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Re: 2nd Generation Ayra

Unread postby Nick Shogun » Sun May 16, 2004 12:34 am

I'm surprised you've improved so much... it's rather shocking. So, WOW. I don't know what style of painting you used, but it makes the scythe look much more realistic than otherwise... sort of 3D, and also sort of bumpy, if that makes sense.

The face is creepy, but only because it looks like what a nekojin really should be drawn as. The proportions look good, cept the hand, which is small BUT well drawn.

As always, you rule.


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Re: 2nd Generation Ayra

Unread postby pd Rydia » Sun May 16, 2004 1:05 pm

Thank you, Lys, Nick. I really appreciate it. ^_^ <p>
<center><small>Dragonhalf in English: a manga

It's big, and it's red / The red dragon, oh, the dread dragon / but never fear, for Dick is here / To slay the dragon~!</p>

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Re: 2nd Generation Ayra

Unread postby Archmage144 » Sun May 16, 2004 2:59 pm

Kate's response to this was basically "whoa, I got fanart o_O?" <p>
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Re: 2nd Generation Ayra

Unread postby The Great Nevareh » Sun May 16, 2004 5:20 pm

I enjoy your work more and more as time goes on, Dia. <p>"There is great disorder under Heaven, and the situation is excellent."
-Mao Tse-Tung</p>

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Re: 2nd Generation Ayra

Unread postby Waldorf Nikki » Wed May 19, 2004 2:44 am

O.O

I am totally loving this pic. I dig the wings. <p>------------------

I hypnotize you.

Dare to be stupid..

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Re: 2nd Generation Ayra

Unread postby pd Rydia » Wed May 19, 2004 3:09 pm

Thanks folks. ^_^ <p>
<center><small>Dragonhalf in English: a manga

It's big, and it's red / The red dragon, oh, the dread dragon / but never fear, for Dick is here / To slay the dragon~!</p>


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