New PS Char up for critique

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Mechanisto
 
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New PS Char up for critique

Unread postby Mechanisto » Sat Nov 08, 2003 10:06 pm

Right.

This being merely the second PS character I've focused on, I need some stalwart and hardy PS wizards to check it over. He's supposed to be an unpredictable wandering sort, allowing me to pop him out of the woodwork for just about any Gaera Main Rp concievable. His abilities were also a lot of fun to make, though the numbers likely need tweaking.

So, um... comments?

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name: Yasp Eoslux - age: 22 - eyes: dark red - hair: very dark green
height: mediumish - build: vaguely scrawny, but handsome

Background:
A self-styled genius and eccentric sorcerer extrordinaire, Yasp is studying the arts of golemancy and alchemy. He was originally born as Fredrick Wickston, the son of a reasonably sucessful merchant. He used to be an ordinary, unexceptional, well-adjusted young boy, with simple hopes and humble dreams. All that changed when a tragic accident at his university's alchemy lab scarred his face for life. When he recovered, he changed his name, started wearing a featureless metal mask, and changed his wardrobe to colorful and exotic vests and ankle-length kilts, all covered in ominous celtic knotwork. He let his hair grow to waist length, took up maniacal laughter as a hobby, and joined the university's drama club.
None of this actually affected his grades, or his congenial manner. He had simply turned into an average well adjusted person with simple hopes and humble dreams, wearing a metal mask and freaky clothes. His professors were forced to admit that his zeal and dedication to study hadn't been lessened in the slightest. Most of the student body believed that the weirdness was caused by the drama club, rather than the explosion (they even went so far as to let him wear the mask during their performance of "The Five Kings of Jerecho," for which his troupe recieved a standing ovation).
With his fourth year finished, Yasp is now required to perform some practical study under real-life conditions, before completing a project for his final exam. He left his beloved university to visit his family and home town for awhile. His brothers thought the mask was pretty cool. His parents still called him Fred, but he didn't mind that.
After an extended stay, he left on his own to resume his personal studies, and make progress towards a masterpiece that would satisfy his professors. Currently, he travels from city to city, learning what he can while supporting himself through alchemy.

Character:
Yasp enjoys the search for knowledge and self-improvement above all else, but doesn't much care for other people, or any of the standards of city life. He does have a strong appreciation for elegance and beauty, and gladly seeks out art in all it's forms. He isn't exceptionally peaceful or violent, and can be stalwart and trustworthy one moment, and a cowardly traitor the next. Most of his classmates describe him as a jester or a monkey, but a very learned and dedicated one. His physique is of average performance but good-looking, and he relies heavily on fast-talk, intimidation, and personal charisma when confronted. He is rarely stubborn, and places little or no value on material posessions or personal power. He tends to maintain a somewhat theatrical air at the least appropriate times. Rumors have it that he's actually quite the ladies man, and has a seductive and romantic side which he rarely shows.
It's obvious he enjoys being as nonsensical as possible, but he isn't actively trying to be strange or eccentric. He simply likes to enjoy himself, and ends up doing strange and eccentric things in the process. Sometimes it's very hard to tell how much of it is just an act. If one word describes him, that word is not widely known.
He's just this guy, y'know?


--Basics--
Name: Yasp Eoslux
RPer: MechanistoX
Race: Human
Class: Alchemist
Level: 1
XP: 0/1000
Max HP: 60
Max MP: 80
Max TP: 20
Initiative 2+2d6
Base AT/PA - 7/7

--Attributes--
Courage: +1
Wisdom: +5
Intuition: +5
Charisma: +3
Agility: +1
Dexterity: +2
Strength: 0
Stamina: +1
Magic Aptitude: 3


Knee-Length Padded Vest (AC:3, 0/0, Dur:12, Wgt:4)
Ornate Long Kilt (AC:6, 0/0, Dur:16, Wgt:6)
Mythril Mask (AC:15, 0/0, Dur:30, Wgt:2)
Pocketed Ingredient Belt (AC:1, 0/0, Dur:14, Wgt:5)
Reinforced Scroll Case (AC:2, 0/0, Dur:20, Wgt:5)
Padded Sandals (AC:0, 0/0, Dur:6, Wgt:1)
Jade Hairpin
Jade Earings
Glass Vial x16
Ceramic Bottle x4
Fine Mortar and Pestle
Fine Calcinator
Fine Alembic
Basic Ingredients


--Skills--
[k] Metallurgy - <Wis> 4
[k] Formal Alchemy - <Wis> 4
[k] Formal Magical Theory - <Wis> 4
[k] Potions - <Wis> 2
[k] Language Lore - <Wis> 2
[k] Survival - <Wis> 2
[k] Cooking - <Wis> 2
[k] Traps - <Wis> 2
[K] Ettiquete/Educational - <Wis> 2
[K] Ettiquete/Mercantile - <Wis> 2
[s] Elementalism - <Mag/Wis/Int> 4
[s] Improvised Golemancy - <Mag/Wis/Int> 2
[s] Pain Resistance - <Cou/Int/Sta> 2
Alchemy - <Wis/Int/Dex> 4
Magic/Golemancy - <Mag/Wis/Int> 4
Magic/Chemical - <Mag/Wis/Int> 4
Magic/Protection - <Mag/Wis/Int> 2
Crafting - <Wis/Int/Dex> 2
Throwing/Potion - [url=http://pub30.ezboard.com/brpgww60462.showUserPublicProfile?gid=mechanistox>MechanistoX</A]&nbsp; Image at: 11/18/03 10:05 pm
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Banjooie
 
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Unread postby Banjooie » Sun Nov 09, 2003 4:11 am

Dude, the spell thief is a living clear globe. Neato. o.o

If you don't know what I'm talking about, it's because you suck.


Mechanisto
 
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Re: .

Unread postby Mechanisto » Sun Nov 09, 2003 8:47 am

Will that negatively affect his chances of applying for another B.Ma at Neo Vane? <p>---
These powerful ships have a tremendous range of fire. Their cannons do enormous amounts of damage to other naval units.</p>

Mechanisto
 
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yay

Unread postby Mechanisto » Thu Nov 13, 2003 7:01 am

Hurrah! New Forum.

Please tell me someone can give me a thorough shakedown on all these numbers and such, now... it silently dropped like a rock last time. Image



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