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[Nate the Dragon Rider]

Background
Name: {Eragon}
Age: {16}
Eyes: {blue}
Hair: {dirty blond}
Height: {6 foot}

&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp When Eragon was young his parents died in a battle for their city. He was then sent to his uncle’s farm in a small town. Eragon lived their most of his life, and grew up with his cousin Kevin. When Eragon turned the age of 14 he was hunting in the forest for their dinner. Since he hunts he has experience with a sword and a bow. When Eragon returned he found his farm destroyed and on fire. His uncle and cousin were both dead. After, he soon stumbled across and egg, which ended up hatching into a dragon. He raised it and grew closer with her every minute. They eventually set off to seek aid in the ways of Magic and more weapon training. He then found a group, which accepted and trained him for 3 years. He grew mentally and physically, becoming ever so powerful in magic and weapons. Now he travels looking for friends to spend the rest of his life with, and learning more about the responsibility of the Dragon Riders.

Basics
RPer: {nate the dragon rider}
Race: {dragon rider}
Level: 1
XP: 0/1000
Max HP: {70}
Max MP: {55}
Max TP: 20
Initiative: {5+2d6}

Attributes
Courage: {3}
Wisdom: {2}
Intuition: {3}
Charisma: {0}
Agility: {2}
Dexterity: {2}
Strength: {3}
Stamina: {3}
Magic Aptitude: {3}

Base AT/PA: {11/11}
Modified for skill: {Sword: 2/2} {Bow: 2/2}
Modified for equipment: {long sword: 0/1} {short bow: 0/0} {shielded robe: 0/0}

Equipment: {longs word, short bow, shielded robe}

Weapon damage: {long sword}
Thrusting: {13+1d6}
Slashing: {20+2d4}
Chopping: {26+2d6}

Weapon damage: {Short bow}
Damage: {13}

Skills
{Sword} – {6} {str/agi/cou}
{Bow} – {5} {str/cou/dex}
{Holy magic} – {3} {int/wis/mag}
{Water magic} – {5} {int/wis/mag}
{Psychokinesis} – {5} {int/wis/mag}
{Telepathy}- (5) {int/wis/mag}
{Summoning powers} – {6} {int/wis/mag}
{Play music}- {3} {wis/int/cha}
Spells
[Heal-1] Waise Heill (5MP)- (5+rank*2+1d6) healing. Heals member of team, ally, or really anything that is not your enemy. It damages undead instead of healing it though.

[Water-1] Aquanr (3MP)- (6+rank*2+1d6) water damage. Can attack any opponent with water power.

[Psychokinesis-1] Thrysta (4MP)- Burst of mental force deals (6+rank+1d6) damage

[Psychokinesis-2] Reisa (8MP)- Can lift 8 pounds of weight.

[Telepathy-8] Draumr Kopa (0MP out of combat, 4MP in combat)- Speak through your mind. Anyone can hear you, unless you direct it towards someone specific.

[Telapathy-4] Slytha (13MP)- read someone’s mind or listen to their thoughts.

[Summon-10] Summon Saphira the Dragon (2MP out of combat, 8MP in combat)- Summons my dragon to the field for (10+1d10) damage. The dragon may fly out of combat to transport team and other things across rivers, etc.

[Spleen]

You can't have more than 4 ranks in a skill on first level.

Plus, "play music" is too broad. Is he playing xylophone, trumpet, lute, his own armpit, the mana stream itself? And he should probably have more non-combat skills than just music-playing. He used to live on a farm. What kinds of things would he learn there, do you think?

Other than that, it looks pretty good. I didn't do any of the math, though. <p>_________________
OLHADO: "You killed more people than anybody in history."
ENDER: "Be the best at whatever you do, that's what my mother always told me."
-Lauro Suleimão "Olhado" Ribeira and Ender Wiggin, Speaker for the Dead</p>

[Uncle Pervy]

You spent more than your thrity allotted skill points (20 + Wis*2 + Int*2)

Also, an infant dragon isn't going to be suitable for any sort of riding until this character is well into old age.

[Elementalist Daien]

See...


Apart from what was said about dragons actually being people in this setting.

Non-intelligent dragons exist, but they're rare, smaller, and wingless.


ANYWAYS.

As for farm skills. Agriculture? Meteorology? There are a number of skills that might aid.