This is alright to start with--honestly when I started RPing I didn't have much more than this to go on. However, when I started RPing
here I had to fill out my character more, because the quality of RPing expected at RPGWW is higher than what most communities require.
First off, I need to ask, do you plan to use this character in Gaera? Gaera is our main world and has a lot of information made up about it already. If you do plan to use him in Gaera, I can help you out with finding a race for him to belong to, and a country to have grown up in, etc.
Now, on to what I can say as it is. That background needs work. Just some questions I thought of while reading the background: if he had foster parents, how did he come to be fostered? Were they the same race as him? How did he find out he was a demon and why didn't he know before? Why did he kill his parents and why hasn't the law come after him? Hopefully, through his background you can give us an idea of what his personality is like.
Also, angsty demon kid is kind of an overdone concept, but that doesn't mean you can't pull it off. You could consider what might make him unique, though (hint: powers do not alone lend to uniqueness). Also, what's his motivation to interact with other characters? Can't have a one-man RP after all.
Ah, and finally, I hate to say that he's overpowered. It's a common problem with people coming in from other communities, so don't feel bad. However, this 12 year old kid would outclass most if not all of the some-hundred characters RPed here...besides being unrealistic, as many of these characters are aged veterans and such whatnot, it's also not very fun for the RPers involved. Sucks out all the challenge and balance, you know?
Specifically, this part is unacceptable: "if you push him far enough, pretty much anything in a three mile radius will die." However, this part is iffy, because it's not well-defined: "Can use skills of other demons/monsters/mages/whatever it is in that RP."
Also, could you please describe the race he belongs to? As in, appearance, innate skills and weaknesses (ability to transform, enhanced sight/smell/so on, weakness to holy magic, etc. etc.), where they live, what their society is like? I'm always interested in people's ideas for races. <p>
<center>Hello, I'm Dia. I'm a dragongirl, and I bite. RAWR!
</center><small>-=- "Maybe... or maybe you're just not drunk enough." -- Nakibe
-=- "Magic. As in, big flashy dink!" -- El Bob (Squintz)
-=- "Look hun, it's...uh...raining... ...frogs...O_o;;;" -- Aya, Queen of Doma (LDC)
-=- "I FOUND A CORNER! I found a corner, I found a corner! See, right here! Stuck on the wall! It's a corner! Woo hoo! Now, to stare at it!" -- Daenj'r (KingOfDoma)</small></p>
Edited by: pd Rydia at: 2/27/04 4:47 pm