I like how it opens with a journal entry. That's a fairly original thing to do. You use nice description in some places too. Like the pendants sparkle.
The one thing that jumps out at me though: Why do the dragons have such.....undragon names?
First, I don't know where Will is from so I have to assume that he's from Igala at first glance, so you may want to have setting more described. It just seems: strange that the dragons have a very 'humanish'-a term used loosely- court, are in human form long enough that they have a child in it (or that they assume human from at all during pregnancy); strange that there names are humanly.
Also, if you want more realism, if the queen was mostly in dragon form then it would make sense that that then embryo would already be in an egg, maybe when she goes in human for the egg shrinks and/or has a soft shell, but I'd think for the sake of the child she'd not put it through so much trauma as to change. If she was in human form then the same applies only without the shell.
Feel free to write more, WIll. Origin fics tend to be very interesting.
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