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Games

Unread postby SDNess » Wed Jun 11, 2003 8:20 pm

Everyone played the game. If you didn't, you were an outcast of society. The game revolved around a fantasy world called Erinae. Players placed the software disk into the CD-ROM drive and put on their suit. Each suit had a helmet which rested on the players' head, gloves with wires connected to the helmet, and a chest set strapped around the players' chest which was also connected to the helmet. On top of helmet was a wireless transmitter that signaled the players' command to the computer.

Akio quickly sprinted up the hardwood stairs of his apartment. He has just gotten the new expansion pack which included new quests, heroes, and items for players to attain on their quests. He had finally saved up enough money and was able to pick one up at Jyounouchi's Game Shop. Akio finally reached the top of the stairs, sprinted to his white computer, and popped open the CD-ROM drive. Fiercely, he tore open the decorated game box and placed the CD-ROM gently into drive. A few prompts came up on his flat screen monitor which he quickly proceeded through. Before Akio could play, however, he had to warm up his suit. Finally, the suit was warmed up. A gentle humming noise sounded throughout the Akio's bedroom. Before Akio put the suit on he decided to browse the message boards which were crowded with topic threads like usual. He took a few moments to see if anything intrigued him. One topic, which was titled "Legend of Nikua Spoilers", immediately grabbed his attention. He clicked the thread with his optical laser mouse and waited for the thread came up. "I just got the Legend of Nikua expansion," read the thread, "it includes three new races - the Droll (a Dwarf and Troll breed), the Beuorgise (a Human and Ogre breed), and the Titan. Also, it includes numerous more items. My favorites are Inuysa Judgment, Angelic Prophecy, and Attack of Attrition. I suggest that all of you buy the expansion right now! It makes the game amazing." Akio exited the thread and looked for more interesting threads. There were none. It was to time to play the game.

Akio got up from his black, swivel chair and picked up his suit. It was still humming. A beat could be sensed throughout the room in result of the humming. Akio gently grabbed the helmet part of the suit as if he was holding a young infant and placed it on his head. Next, he took the chest set carefully put it on over the helmet and connected the wires. Finally, he took the gloves, connected them first, and then put them on his large hands.

The helmet covered the eyes with clear plastic so that the player could move around reality. Akio, with his suit on, sat down in his leather swivel chair. The last preparation task was to plug the final chord at the top of the helmet into the computer monitor. He did so. Suddenly, the clear plastic in Akio's helmet became fogged and his bedroom disappeared. Blue beams of light started shining throughout the space Akio was in. It was like he was traveling at the speed of light. Abruptly, a feminine voice echoed,

"Welcome SDNess. The last time you played was Tuesday, April 16 at 9:15 PM. What is your password?"
"Orion," answered Akio quickly as if he had something important to do.
"Process complete -- You may now enter the Erinae Server Transport Station. Thank you for coming and enjoy your gaming experience."

Immediately after the voice finished speaking, Akio's body transformed. He looked down as his feet, legs, abdomen, stomach, and chest split into thousands of particles. The particles dissolved. His head did not split up and dissolve. Instead, his ears elongated and hair lightened to brown. The rest of his body changed sequentially. Akio's clothes were changed the traditional Elvin attire which consisted of knee high, leather boots, green silk pants, a gray long-sleeve shirt, and a navy blue cloak. A curved sword hung at his left side.
The blue beams of light that surrounded Akio disappeared and he landed in the middle of a busy medieval market place. There were five exits. Each exit lead to one of the Erinae servers; Dellteria, Giya, Latrane, Qwegya, and Suden. Each server had its own warp gate. Akio only played on Delleteria because it had the best anti-hacking software installed. Most of the other servers had outdated software and its players suffered from frequent hacking attacks. Akio moved progressed through the busy market to the Dellteria warp gate. Unexpectedly, a bearded human character ran right into Akio and knocked him on the group. His faced smacked on the hard marble ground and saliva oozed from his mouth. Other players in the market turned around in response to the action. The bearded human, however, did not stop to help Akio. Instead, he sped on into the mass of people. A gray gargoyle came over to help Akio.

"Are you alright?" asked the Gargoyle sincerely.
"Uh…yeah…thanks," responded Akio as the Gargoyle helped him from the ground.
"What was that all about?"
"I'm not sure. He just ran right into me. Thanks for helping me though. My name is SDNess. What's yours?"
"Giran," answered the gargoyle as if he were a person of importance.
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp "Oh. Well, I have to get going, but maybe we will play some quests together some time."
"That would be great! Bye."
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Akio quickly forgot about the bearded man and went to check the weapon shops. He went to his favorite weapon broker, Merny's Weapon and Magic Shop. Merny and Akio had become good friends throughout Akio's time playing the game. Once, Akio arrived at the shop he immediately went in so that he could find a good deal. A white piece of parchment grabbed his attention instantly. It was if the paper physically pulled him. "The following players are wanted by the administration: Clone111, Koba9Z, and GryX," read the paper, "Reward is nine hundred gyrupee." After, Akio had fully read the paper, he continued on into the shop.

“Welcome SDNess! What can I do for you today?" said Merny easily showing that he was in need of a customer.
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp "Hey Merny, what new weapons do you have today?"
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp "I was just sold a Juyi dagger for seventy nine gyrupee. Would you like to see it?"
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp "Sure. I've never seen one," answered Akio as Merny brought out the dagger.
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp "It’s very old and malleable so watch out. I wouldn't sell it as a weapon. It could probably fall under the art artifact category."
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp "I like it," said Akio while he examined the shimmering blade, "I'm probably going on a quest soon and I don't have enough gyrupees to pay for it. Make sure you don't sell it before I come back."
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp "You can take it now. Just make sure you come back to pay me."
Akio left Merny's Shop and trotted make into the market square. Suddenly, an Elvin wizard shouted to Akio.
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp "There you are, Nessie!" shouted Mentat joyfully.
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp ”Hey, Mentat! Why haven’t you contacted me?"
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp "There has been some freaky stuff going on in game," said Mentat as if he was extremely excited.
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp "Huh? I haven't seen anything on the message boards, “responded Akio who was showing that he was confused.
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp "Obviously. There hasn't been any information on the boards about this stuff. The administration is really trying to keep everything about it under wraps."
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp "Oh, I see. So aren't you going to tell me what it is that is actually happening," pushed Akio clearly indicating that he wanted to know.
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp "Many people have been disappearing in game. Also, many characters are reporting to have been attacked by other characters equipped with hacks. These hacks are serious man. The hacks don't just hurt the in game character because in most cases the characters' real body is hurt. It's really freaking me out."
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp "Wow. This is serious. How did you find out this stuff?"
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp "Hah, I've got my in game contacts - the connections. I know that the admins are trying to track the characters and their movements and behaviors in game. I think they have a couple of suspects too, but I'm not exactly sure. The problem is that only the top admins are allowed to access the information of players. It’s illegal if anyone else does."
"Well, there's nothing we can do. We will just have to leave it up to the admins," said Akio as if he didn't care what happened in Erinae.
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp "That's true, but it still freaks me out. I'll keep you updated on the upcoming information."
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp "Okay. Do you want to try a quest?" questioned Akio tauntingly.
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp "Well-"
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp "-- We will make it a quick one, come on."
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp "Alright, but it has to be very quick."
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp "It will be. Relax. I always thought you were the one concerned on improving your characters stats," taunted Akio.
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Akio and Mentat headed for the Dellteria warp gate. As soon as the two warriors reached the gate, they got on the circular transport pad and waited. After, a couple of seconds their bodies vaporized from the market place. Akio and Mentat's feet gently fell to the ground. An eminent mountain towered above them. Snow covered the peak. An articulately built stone temple rested at the base of the mountain.
Akio and Mentat sprinted into the stone temple. There were four stages to the temple. At the end of the fourth stage an artifact could be found. Gyrupees, ammunition like arrows, magic, or health tablets usually lay in the remains of the dead foes. Akio noticed a weird figure to his right. Akio stopped and his legs stiffened. A small, black orb floated amongst the green, coniferous trees. Could the black orb be a hack? Akio didn't know, but sped on to catch Mentat.
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A swarm of twenty zubbat came from all corners of the room. There were five zubbat per corner. Mentat and Akio easily defeat the zubbat by standing back to back in the center of the room. Each of the warriors took on ten zubbat each. Mentat's health and magic had depleted. This was because Mentat had an insufficient amount of armor and his only weapon used magic. They continued to the next room. A passage opened in the stone wall adjacent to them. They stared into darkness.

&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp “Let’s go!” urged Akio bravely, but the fear was palpable in his voice.
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp “Alright, alright…”

Akio and Mentat reluctantly stepped forward into the dark room. Torches lit from each corner of the new room. Suddenly, a mass of gnomes and sprites appeared. The gnomes wore little cotton cloths and were armed with small axes. The sprites on the other hand, hovered above the ground fueling their magic. A high shrill sounded from the mass of foes. Mentat and Akio glanced at each other. Mentat stayed at the room entrance powering up his magic as Akio unsheathed his sword and attacked one of the sprites. His curved sword ricocheted violently off the sprite and a light blue field formed around all of the other sprites and gnomes.

“They have defense!” Akio cried.
“Hmmm…I’m not sure how to beat them…let me power up my Adrion’s Charmise spell,” advised Mentat as a large energy ball formed around his hands.
“You ready?”
“Yeah, here we go!”
Mentat released the massive energy ball from his hands. The gnomes and sprites took their attention away from Akio and looked in horror at the giant ball.
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp “Attack their backs! It’s their weak spot!”
Akio gripped his sword and took a forceful blow at the back of each enemy. Each of the gnomes and sprites vaporized and a little bit of magic power lay in the remains.
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp “Nice work. Can I have the magic power?”
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp “Yeah, but let’s get going.”
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They walked into the next chamber and confronted a massive dragon. The dragon had green scales and was able to breath fire. It wasted no time. A massive swirling inferno of fire came rushing at Akio. There was nothing he could do. “No!” screamed Mentat. The flame disappeared, surprisingly, in front of Akio’s face. The dragon let out a ferocious roar. It was extremely mad. Suddenly, the dragon split into thousands of particles and vaporized.
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“What happened?” asked Mentat dumbfounded.
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp “I don’t know. We didn’t even touch it.”
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp A mysterious sound came from the space where the dragon had been. It sounded like the cry of a lungaa wolf of the frigid north. The cry stopped.
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp “Hahahaha!” cackled a hidden figure’s voice.

The black orb formed again. It was massive. The orb looked as if it contained black water because of the ripples that formed from the air currents. A figure formed inside the orb and it slowly moved out of the orb. The bearded man who had run into Akio earlier that day slid out.

&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp “Haha. Hello, SDNess and Mentat,” said the man evilly.
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp “Wh…who are you,” replied Mentat who was regretting his decision to come.
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp “I am known as Clone111.”
Mentat and Akio were silent.
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp “Hand over all of your items, weapons, magic, and health tablets NOW!”
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp “No,” said Akio defiantly.
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp “Then pay the price!”
The bearded man leapt into the air. He moved extremely quick and was hard to keep an eye on. It was as if the man could disappear and reappear to a different location a couple of yards a way.
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp “He’s too quick for me! I can’t handle him! He is definitely hacking.
&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp &nbsp “Heheh,” chortled the man.

He jumped to amazingly high height and unsheathed a small dagger that had been in his lower boot. Akio reached for a pouch on his belt that had health tablets. It wasn’t there! Where had it gone? Had the bearded man stolen it at the market place? Akio’s hands shook violently. Where was his sword? He glanced to his side and saw the blade shine in the firelight. But it was to far away. He had dropped the blade with out realizing when the black orb reappeared. The juyi dagger! Akio reached into his left pocket and put his hand on the ancient artifact. He was ready to draw it even if it could break. Akio glanced at the spot where the man had been, but he only saw a stone wall. He looked up, “Ahhh,” Akio cried as the man attacked him from above. Everything went black.
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Akio woke up lying on his apartment floor. His game suit was unconnected from the monitor, but it was still on his body. What had happened? Akio got up slowly from the carpeted floor for his head hurt. Akio noticed a vague music theme in the background. It was to the game. Akio remembered. Mentat and he had been hacked. What if his character wasn’t there anymore? Akio quickly tried to log back in to the game, but he kept getting “Access Denied” or “Invalid Username”. Akio was furious. He had spent two years of hard work building up his character, SDNess.

Later in the day, Akio sat at the window of his apartment. He watched the hovering automobiles speed throughout the highway. All of the people in the cars were concerned on some object of the game whether it was gaining experience points or attaining new items. The game was everything. What purpose did the game have? It didn’t offer any reward in reality. Akio was tired of the game, but for he had to play. Akio was addicted.

“Should I keep playing?” murmured Akio to himself.
After Akio had made his decision he left the window and decided to get something to eat.




Ghastly Knight
 

Re: Games

Unread postby Ghastly Knight » Wed Jun 11, 2003 11:08 pm

I will say one thing, well, two things. First, welcome to the board. Second, dotHACK. That is all <p>
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SDNess
 

Re: Games

Unread postby SDNess » Thu Jun 12, 2003 8:11 pm

Yes there is a lot of .Hack influence. If you want to read my prewrite I sight two influences:

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I am going to write a story based around an MMORPG. An MMORPG is a massively multiplayer online role-playing game. They exist in our world (games such as Everquest, Dark Age of Camelot, Asheron’s Call, Ultima Online) and are becoming very popular among “gamers”. However at our state in the technological world we can only achieve a two sensual experience while playing a video game (hearing/seeing). The game that exists in my story gives the player a five sensual experience (hearing/seeing/feeling/smelling/tasting). Instead of just staring at a computer screen, using a mouse/keyboard and speakers the player would wear a “suit” that allows for the senses to work during the game. The setting of the game would be in a fantasy world.

I have not yet developed the plot completely yet. I have, however, come up with some ideas. The story will only focus on one character – at all times. I will not give different perspectives of the story through different characters as is done in Ender’s Game. There are a couple of reasons for this: (1), while playing an online game the person does not usually know whom they are playing with (unless they set something up with a friend from reality). There is a certain amount of mysteriousness when you talk to a person (whom you have never seen before) over the internet. You image what they look like, et cetera. (2), in result of the limit on number of pages, it is best not to get to deeply involved in the character personalities (at this time). Back to the plot: I might incorporate a mystery theme into the plot. For example, unusual things are happening to players all around the world or that a mysterious “item” has appeared in the game in which players must trek throughout the whole world to find.

I have thought about some names from the title. I know that a title is not the most important thing to focus on at stage of the game, but I always have fun naming my fictional pieces. I was thinking about incorporating the name of the game into the title of the story. In addition, I am thinking about making the title of the game/story in Latin (some words/phrases I am leaning towards “The World or “War Games”).

From what I have described above it might be difficult to identify my story as science fiction. It is. The story takes place in the future with better technology (noticed that I said better, not highly advanced technology with fantastical things like flying cars). The players use special suits during gameplay. If none of this information was given to the reader they most definitely might mistake it for fantasy since most of the action/story will take place in a fantastic world.

There are two sources for my work. My first source is the novel called the Caverns of Socrates, by Dennis L. McKiernan. I have not read it yet because I have not had enough time, but I do know the basic premise of it. My second source is the Japanese animation, .hack//SIGN (weird spelling). I have not seen every episode of .hack//SIGN. Again, I do know the basic premise. Therefore, I am using a similar plot to these stories and am adding several of my own, original ideas to it.



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Re: Games

Unread postby Archmage144 » Fri Jun 13, 2003 9:08 pm

A couple notes.

One, "The World," as I'm sure you know, is what the game in .hack's series is called, and thus is a poor title for something which is obviously .hack influenced. Second, there is a movie called "War Games" about how some pimply teenagers almost start World War III by trying to play Global Thermonuclear War (which is a very lousy game, I might add--they should have taken the computer's suggestion and played chess instead). While "Terrarum" (Latin for "The World") is not the name of anything to my knowledge, it's not particularly inventive in my mind and I personally dislike the sound of it, and "Ludi Belli," which is Latin for "War Games" is probably a better title, though people are just going to go "WTF is he talking about?" I'd suggest coming up with a title that isn't related to something else already if at all possible.

Two, your writing style is, for want of a better word, slightly choppy as a result of your tendency to break things up into very simple sentences instead of using compound sentences to express more complex thoughts. I would suggest you practice balancing the number of simple sentences with compound sentences so that your piece does not look as though it were written by a grade-schooler.

If you wish, I can give a more detailed critique, but if you're the sensitive type and don't like any criticism whatsoever due to an inability to separate yourself from your work, I shall refrain from doing so. <p>
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Re: Games

Unread postby SuperRube » Fri Jun 13, 2003 10:30 pm

He could also say "It sucks ass" like most other people would.

He's easy going like that. <p>

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Unread postby SDNess » Sat Jun 14, 2003 12:40 pm

Critique away Archmage144.

Anyway, I didn't call it "The World" or "War Games" - the world was called Erinae.

Choppy sentences - okay. Any specific examples in the piece.


Archmage144
 

Re: Games

Unread postby Archmage144 » Sat Jun 14, 2003 3:23 pm

I was talking about how in the prewrite you mentioned that being the title.

Anyway.

"Everyone played the game. If you didn't, you were an outcast of society. The game revolved around a fantasy world called Erinae. Players placed the software disk into the CD-ROM drive and put on their suit."

This is a rather choppy sounding list, particularly the third sentence. Some of these sentences could be reworded and made into compounds.

"Fiercely, he tore open the decorated game box and placed the CD-ROM gently into drive."

Show, don't tell. Saying it was decorated describes nothing. Describe how it's decorated. Otherwise, it just seems like an extraneous adjective you threw in to make an elementary school teacher happy.

"Akio got up from his black, swivel chair and picked up his suit. It was still humming. A beat could be sensed throughout the room in result of the humming."

A similar issue with sentence choppiness, plus word repetition.

"Before Akio put the suit on he decided to browse the message boards which were crowded with topic threads like usual."

Odd word usage--I'd suggest "as usual" instead of "like usual." A comma is required before using which as a conjunction, and in this sentence, it serves as a conjunction.

"Akio gently grabbed the helmet part of the suit as if he was holding a young infant and placed it on his head."

This is a VERY awkward metaphor. I, uh...would suggest a different one. Also, throughout that paragraph, the story flows like a very choppy shopping list or cake-baking instructions. Instead of "so and so did this. Then they did this, and then this. Finally, they did this," consider incorporating all the actions using the progressive, such as:

"Grabbing his virtual reality suit gingerly, Akio slipped on the accompanying helmet and gloves, preparing to immerse himself in the world of Erinae."

The difference has to do with the number of time transition words used--too many make the story feel disjointed instead of connected and fluid. If you want to add more description, that's fine.

"The last preparation task was to plug the final chord at the top of the helmet into the computer monitor. He did so. Suddenly, the clear plastic in Akio's helmet became fogged and his bedroom disappeared. Blue beams of light started shining throughout the space Akio was in. It was like he was traveling at the speed of light."

Again, sentence choppiness, especially the "he did so."

"'Welcome SDNess. The last time you played was Tuesday, April 16 at 9:15 PM. What is your password?'"

Self-insertion is generally not a good idea for various reasons.

"He looked down as his feet, legs, abdomen, stomach, and chest split into thousands of particles. The particles dissolved. His head did not split up and dissolve."

I hope you know what my beef about this section is.

"The rest of his body changed sequentially. Akio's clothes were changed the traditional Elvin attire which consisted of knee high, leather boots, green silk pants, a gray long-sleeve shirt, and a navy blue cloak. A curved sword hung at his left side. The blue beams of light that surrounded Akio disappeared and he landed in the middle of a busy medieval market place. There were five exits."

Same old song.

"Akio moved progressed through the busy market to the Dellteria warp gate."

If you're going to use a thesaurus, which many good writers do if they need a friendly reminder of a more powerful synonym, make sure you proofread so that you don't leave behind glowing trails that say "hey, I used a thesaurus!"

The name of the currency, gyrupee, rolls off my tongue something like a live sea urchin. Just for the record, it's a whole lot better for the sake of readers, especially since a lot of people say things aloud in their heads while reading to process them better subconcsiously, if you name things in a manner that isn't insanely hard to pronounce.

I'll go on later, if you'd like--there is also the fact that the plot thus far sweats .hack//SIGN through every pore, something I'd suggest avoiding if at all possible... <p>
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SDNess
 

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Unread postby SDNess » Sat Jun 14, 2003 10:39 pm

Thanks for commenting -- it really helps. : )

A couple of years ago, in English class, I learned that it is good to mix up sentence length. My teacher was telling me that it is not good to have a peice with all short sentences nor is it good to have a piece with all long sentences. We looked over a piece by John Steinbeck (I think it was The Pearl). I had this in my mind as I was typing this story. I guess I was trying to hard to make the sentences different lengths. Heh, maybe I am kidding myself - did I even change lengths or not? In addition, one problem I have is actually making sentences smooth. When I write them, I think they are smooth, but are not.

"Akio gently grabbed the helmet part of the suit as if he was holding a young infant and placed it on his head."

I guess it is a pretty weird metaphor. I like your alternative sentence. ; )

:Self-insertion is generally not a good idea for various reasons.:

Why not? I mean this is a "fan-fic" forum.

:If you're going to use a thesaurus, which many good writers do if they need a friendly reminder of a more powerful synonym, make sure you proofread so that you don't leave behind glowing trails that say "hey, I used a thesaurus!":

Yes, I do use a thesaurus. Were the words I used too complicated throughout the piece?

:The name of the currency, gyrupee, rolls off my tongue something like a live sea urchin. Just for the record, it's a whole lot better for the sake of readers, especially since a lot of people say things aloud in their heads while reading to process them better subconcsiously, if you name things in a manner that isn't insanely hard to pronounce.:

Well I thought of the Legend of Zelda currency - rupees - and modified the name.

:I'll go on later, if you'd like--there is also the fact that the plot thus far sweats .hack//SIGN through every pore, something I'd suggest avoiding if at all possible...:

If you want to continue...go right ahead.


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Re: re:

Unread postby pd Rydia » Sat Jun 14, 2003 10:57 pm

This is a fanfic forum, but it's aimed at fanfictions and background stories for our RPers. We also have standards of writing here.

Self-insertion is one of the most basic screw-ups a writer can get him- or herself into. It leads to overly strong character attachment and an inability to separate self from character, which among other things, hinders the creation and development of a realistic character. <p>
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Archmage144
 

Re: Games

Unread postby Archmage144 » Sun Jun 15, 2003 12:10 am

Too complex? Not at all, SDNess. I was just refrerring to this gem:

"Akio moved progressed through the busy market"

You apparently looked up a synonym and then didn't delete the original word. <p>
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Unread postby SDNess » Mon Jun 16, 2003 9:40 pm

"Akio moved progressed through the busy market"

You apparently looked up a synonym and then didn't delete the original word.

LMAO!


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Re: re:

Unread postby Archmage144 » Mon Jun 16, 2003 10:09 pm

We'll have none of that commie talk here. <p>
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Unread postby SDNess » Wed Jun 18, 2003 7:11 pm

Okay then LOL!



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