Towards a More Rational Magic (character/setting sketches)

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Towards a More Rational Magic (character/setting sketches)

Unread postby Animala » Tue Jun 03, 2003 11:17 pm

So, yeah, this post'll be where I put random thoughts and information for a setting/story I'm working. Here's something that should be fairly puzzling, but, I hope, somewhat intruiging.

Destiny's Arrow


The window was cool, even through the gloves on her hands.

She remembered the cold, and the light that shone in the darkness like the stars outside, illuminating nothing but providing small comfort nonetheless. Cold, and a single light in absolute darkness were all she remembered of the time before everything changed, and she grasped them with all her might. Cold, and the light in the darkness. The only memories that never changed.

There had been a time when she had thought she had found a place for herself again. She knew if she only had time to stop, she could anchor down the floating bits of memory. Once, she had known a place of peace. There she gathered her thoughts, and they protected her. She had named that place Haven, and she had thought she would find her answer there, where none could assail her. But her foes had torn down the mountains to ruin her, and her thoughts were scattered and beaten back, and she had abandoned them and fled. She hoped to find them again someday.

“Are you all right, miss?” a voice asked her.

“Yes, Clarence, thank you,” she responded without looking away from the window.

“We’re approaching the Gate now, miss. Where to?" it persisted.

“Wherever it takes us, Clarence.”

Clarence nodded, knowing there would be no further explanation from his passenger. Though he had never asked her name, he had carried her on these trips many times before. Her name never seemed important, anyway. He remembered the day he first met her. She looked like she had just come from a funeral, dressed all in black, with a thick black veil obscuring her face. She had asked him to take her with him, and he had responded without thinking.

It was so easy to do that, with her along. If he didn’t think, everything would turn out fine. He had no reason to expect much from life. He was pudgy, balding, and knew he wasn’t particularly intelligent. He had gotten into the dead-end business of being a charter pilot by purchasing a ship that was too small to carry many passengers and lacked the luxury of even the most Spartan of the starliners these days. But ever since he had taken that job for free, things had worked out for him.

So he had never asked her name, or why the Gates always opened for her and why they were never stranded in the middle of nowhere when they passed through without a destination. And had he never asked who she mourned for, or why she moved around so much. Nor would he ask now. He leaned back in his chair and aggressively ignored the sudden, looming shadows created by the brilliant light of the now-active gate.

Behind him, the woman closed her hand against the window, as though to rescue a bit of starlight from the blaze ahead. And Destiny’s Arrow silver hull gleamed in the reflected glow of the Gate, and was gone.

******

Elsewhere, the daily administrative tasks of managing the successes of a thriving organization were disrupted, and the normal chaotic clamor of operations dulled to a long, anxious hush by a single brief message, appearing on all readouts and screens:

Please be advised. The Mourner has moved.


(edit)Adjusted for better wording(/edit)

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Re: Towards a More Rational Magic (character/setting sketche

Unread postby pd Rydia » Tue Jun 03, 2003 11:29 pm

Spiffy. o.o Yes it was intriguing, I had to read through this twice. The last two sentences are a good hook indeed.

I have to say the following is worded a bit oddly: "Behind him, the woman closed her hand around a single star, as if by doing so she could take it with her." It reads to me like she's actually closing her hand around a star, which is rather impossible. o.o I assume she's closing her hand against the windowview of a star... <p>
<span style="font-size:xx-small;">-=- "YOU SEE THE MIGHTY DAMARAMU'S BRAIN IS VERY COMPACT!" -- Damaramu
-=- "Don't worry Mink, I'll be good excess baggage!" -- Pia
-=- "But I'm a slime half!" -- Princess Vena
-=- "OH BY THE SEVEN GODS IT'S A MECHANICAL BIRD! But it's so...small..." -- announcer guy
-=- "Demons don't care about story continuity!" -- Doug Finn</span></p>


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